also try not to use computer talk such as “omg”READERReport 2005-07-27 19:23:02Chris why are you reading a story marked gay, rape and boy if you don’t like gay stuf f and gross are you saying people never leave the house for more tanh 1 1/2 hours, and is says fiction why you read this if you don’t like rape fantasy. Mom xxx 12 comments«123»Anonymous readerReport 2010-07-30 11:36:27Poorly written due to the text talk such as “Omg”. good story«123» good story«123» The storyline was nice but like I said not enough details.Anonymous readerReport 2008-08-01 03:29:44awsome story 10/10READERReport 2007-09-28 00:14:32cool he should have cryed and begged more but very goodREADERReport 2005-09-12 00:32:29it was an “okay” story, if it was longer it would have been better and i know that this is fiction but making it a little more realistic would help.
